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Another fantastic song by the guy with the most original name on newgrounds.
An different/original take on something commonly represented by hard basses or generic 8-bit tracks. Does this new attempt have the power to impress?
Starting off the song with a nice yet simple melodic instrument. This is something i definitely wouldnt advise. The instrument you chose was nice but in allot of areas i did definitly of liked to hear another synth weave around that one. Preferably a sliding synth wich , if done right, the sliding is a great way to represent some kind of emotion or living thing. And throwing some pan in there couldn't hurt either.
-0:00. A bass kick with some nice reverb makes the listener feel like something big is about to come in... But it doesn't.
-0:04. There is no more trace of the reverb from the kick and you are left with an empty feel. (This is actually an inexistent issue, because it only *feels* empty because of the kick from before, so i definitely advise removing that, or adding some more percussions to keep the reverb coming) (there is no point putting more reverb on the main synth because it is so light that it wouldn't really make any difference anyway)
-0:08. i stopped being so negative and really enjoyed the melody and atmosphere the main synth created but i also hoped something would add soon because of the still empty feel of the song.
-0:13. early kicks too announce the soon added instruments. I think this should of been earlier to make it feel more like a build up then just a huge step up (going from the emptiness to the second rep.)
-0:14. I definitely think you should of made at least a small build up because going from 1 to 3 instruments was a bit of a big move for my tastes. Not that noticeable... I'm just trying really hard.
-0:14B. Nice snare drum. I would put some reverb on it since there was some on the kick but... its really just a matter of opinion, it still sounds good without.
-0:14C. I recognized Nexus...yay...
-0:14 - 0:41. the addition of the pad was nice although nothing special. Thats not always a bad thing.
-between 0:41 & 0:42. I think you should put a small pattern thats on a single key... (i don't really know how to explain it... like the intro in -Its a cold world- by mrmilkcarton.) and during that pattern the bass that you have coming in at 0:42 should have a cut off/ fade in to make the song feel more like a growing tree then a game of tetris (yeah don't even try to get it)
-0:56. Love your signature synth, it fills the song with energy and really goes well with the beat. The melody you used on it was also nice but i still wish it got its own transition in and out.
-1:26 - 2:06. I like this part actually but i still think it would be a great place for a both, a great pad highlight (preferably something orchestral-like) part and a large crescendo
-2:48. The voice sample is a good idea but it doesn't really represent in any way the song or the robot theme.
-2:49. come on! Put a 5 second insanely quick and intense buildup! sweep effects are allways good for that.
-2:50. This is what i like to call the last stand. Its a kind of outro that isnt really an outro. Its the climax. What i dont like about your climax, is that its exactly the same pattern(s) as 0:56 witch, when you realize it, makes it kinda stale. A quick fix methode would simply be to take the same pattern, clone it, and make the signature synth play one octave higher in addition to it playing its normal octave and the same thing for the bass except an octave lower instead of higher.
Overall: its a nice peice that definitely deserves a listen from anyone who likes the genre. It strikes a high production quality to newgrounds standards and the mastering is very well done. its only two flaws are that it has a lack of automations and build ups and that it does not really seem to have any relation with its desired theme.
MrFijiWiji, i can see that you have allot of potential and if only you could master the usage of automations, im sure that there will be no limit to your success.
~Simon
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